On Equality
In the days when a woman's entire obligation was to be a good daughter， a good wife and a good mother， men and women were far from equal。 Women suffered sexual discrimination until the so-called feminism came into being。 Nowadays， feminism has been running for over a century。 Result? It ran into the extreme of "equality" from my perspective。
Most of us agree that men and women should enjoy equality in this modern society。 But what on earth does this equality mean? To be "equal"， those for feminism would like to share everything with men they split bills， apply for masculine jobs，etc。 They intended to buy in all the advantages and disadvantages of being a man。 On their long journey to the "equal world"，they've forgotten some basic facts they ARE women。 Even school children know that women， after all， are different from men both physically and mentally。 It is unwise， or even stupid，to ignore all these differences and pursue a so called "equal world"。 We couldn't expect a man to give birth to a baby as we couldn't expect the sun to rise in the west。 Likewise， we couldn't expect a woman to become the world's fastest runner，as is simple， but seems forgotten by those feminists。
Equality is not bisecting everything。 Real equality should be built upon the common sense of the basic sexual differences。Since some of the jobs can only be done well enough by men，women should not feel discriminated when we fail。 After all，there're also some jobs， which can only be perfectly done with women's hands。 These are not symbols of inequality， but natural laws。 What really counts is equality in rights， reputation，etc。 Only when all the individuals value the spirit of being equal can women really enjoy equality with men。
簡 評
男女平等是人們的美好夙願，但什麼才是真正的平等?怎樣促成平等的實現?一些女權主義者們所倡導的能帶來真正意義的平等嗎?這是文章要告訴我們的。
文章觀點比較獨特，向進行了一個多世紀的女權運動提出了質疑。開篇亮出了觀點，明確表態。“Nowadays，feminism has been running for over a century．Result?It ran into the extreme of‘equality' from my perspective．”在第二段寫到女權運動在現今社會的產物，進一步指出，“It is unwise，or even stupid，to ignore a11 these differences and pursue a so-called ‘equal world~”，並且附加了兩個簡潔有力的事實例證，加強這一論述觀點。到此為止，文章的論述都是有條有理的，但文章接下來就急於結尾了，而對於什麼是真正的平等，和如何促成平等的實現，幾乎是一語帶過，只寫到，“What really counts is equality in rights，reputation，etc．”沒有展開任何的論述，感覺是指出了問題，卻沒找到真正的方向，最後一段的論述空洞，沒有說服力，讓人覺得虎頭蛇尾，實在可惜。
文章中的關聯詞使用得不多，從語言表述方面也還不夠成熟。英語語言是一種“chain laneuaee”，而準確、恰當的關聯詞是語言學習是否步入一個成熟階段的衡量指數，這也是該習作要注意提高的地方。