dear nikki,
i have read your problem .from the letter ,i know you have many different ideas about your family rules .you said you had to do chores after school ,but your school life was always tiring .if i were you ,i would talk with my mother ,and tell her i was very tired to do chores after school .but you must be very politely ,then maybe your mother could understand you .and if you isn't good at speaking i think you could write a letter for your mother.
i think you only need tell your mother about your problems ,your mother could understand you .in fact ,your mother loves you.
ok, best wishes to you.
yours
lili
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1.dear nikki, ---英語中信的開頭要頂格寫。
2.i have read your problem .---應該是我收到了你的信後知道你的事情，直接用i have received your letter.就可以了。
3.but you must be very politely ,----提建議應該用should 較好。另外be動詞後套用形容詞，把politely改成polite.
4.i think you could write a letter for your mother. -----寫信給某人套用to。
參考例句(文)
1i have received your letter.
2.i think you could write a letter to your mother.
3對於幹家務和學習方面提建議的課用一下句子：
study must come first.(學習第一）
sometimes,doing chores can make us relaxed after studying for a long time.
if you finished doing your schoolwork,try to help your mother with some housework.