my dream is to be a tercher.because i can teach many students.i can make friends with them.i'm going to stdy hard.i'm going to learn english very well because i want to be an english teacher.i'mgoing to pratise my english every day.i'm going to beijing foreige languageuniversity and i'm going to learn english there.i also like foreige culture.i'm going to learn english in america or emglish.
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1、a tercher 拼寫錯誤 a teacher
2、i'm going to stdy hard.i'm going to learn english very well because i want to be an english teacher. 此句過於冗長，根據前後內容，可改為i'm going to study english hard.because i want to be an english teacher. 注意單詞拼寫：study.
3、i'm going to beijing foreige language university and i'm going to learn english there.i also like foreige culture.i'm going to learn english in america or emglish. 此句前後沒有條理性，表達不清楚，有重複，可改為： i'm going to learn english in beijing foreign language university .i also like foreign culture. at last, i'm going to learn english in america or england some day. 單詞拼寫錯誤: foreign \ english
4、在表達有先後順序的步驟時，可適當地運用一些詞：first (at first )\ next \ then \ last(at last, finally)等等。
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my dream
my dream is to be a tercher.because i can teach many students.i can make friends with them. first ,i'm going to study english hard.because i want to be an english teacher. then, i'm going to learn english in beijing foreign language university . i also like foreign culture. at last, finally,i'm going to learn english in america or england some day.