Television Advertisements
Television Advertisements
Today, a growing number of commercial (商業性的) advertisements jump into TV programs, which is a controversial issue.
Television advertisements have positive aspects. First, they can provide viewers with valuable information about merchandise. Second, the wide spread of TV ads may also stimulate the economy. Finally, these commercials (廣告) often finance the operation cost of television stations.
However, television advertisements also have negative aspects. In the first place, these ads often interrupt interesting programs. Besides, some ads may be highly unreliable if they are motivated by profit. What is more, ads may increase people's greed by encouraging them to own so called "valuable" products. Finally, some TV ads give viewers a false sense of reality by promising that certain products will make potential customers lucky, attractive, rich and successful.
Weighing the positive and negative aspects, I think that we should turn TV ads to their best advantage. TV ads should be carefully examined and scientifically edited before they are allowed to become a part of people's life. TV stations and producers should treat TV ads as their good servant, not their bad master.
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Television Advertisements