my mother is a worker. how old is she? guess! she’s forty-five, she like watching tv. on saturdays and sundays, she likes going to the zoo. she doesn’t work on saturdays and sundays. my father is a worker, too.he likes swimming .and i and my sister is student. we both like playing games and go shopping.
my grandfather and grandmother likes running on saturdays and walking on sundays. they like ducks, but i don’t. i like dogs very much. in the evening, we watch tv. some times i listen to music. but my mother, grandfather and grandmother doesn’t, they like reading.
i love my happy family very much. do you like my family?
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my mother is a worker. how old is she? guess! she’s forty-five, she like watching tv. on saturdays and sundays, she likes going to the zoo. she doesn’t work on saturdays and sundays. my father is a worker, too.he likes swimming .and i and my sister is student. we both like playing games and go shopping.
my grandfather and grandmother likes running on saturdays and walking on sundays. they like ducks, but i don’t i like dogs very much. in the evening, we watch tv. some times i listen to music. but my mother, grandfather and grandmother doesn’t， they like reading.
i love my happy family very much. do you like my family?
批改
1.she’s forty-five, （and)she like(likes) watching tv.
2.and i and my sister is student改 and my sister and i are students.
3.and go(going) shopping.
4.some times i listen to music.
5.grandfather and grandmother doesn’t，改為grandfather and grandmother don't like music.
這篇文章寫的不錯，很真實，作者的里路不錯，有幾個基本的錯誤，希望以後注意。