last week i went and saw the final piano competion. i am sad i did not win the finalist round. they all get to play with the city orchestra. first , yan xiao played, i thought he played very well, but no one agreed with me. a boy from another city named hao hengchuan played extremily well. he played with a lot of passion, and really it was a flawless preformance. yue yongli also played well. she had a lot of fake acting, but i guess it wa good for the judges. honestly, i think i deserve to win. i know it will be my turn next time.
批 改 老 師victory評分78分級別優良評語
批改：
1.作文中每一段的首行應縮進4個英文字元。
2.第一行went的原型為go做去某地講為不及物動詞因此後面應加上to 改為went to 第一行am改為was，因為你在講故事所以套用過去時態。第一行i am sad i did not win the 。。改為i am sad and i did not win the 。。。因為前後是兩個並列的句子中間必須有連詞。
3.第二行finalist改為final因為final本身就是“最後”的意思無級別變化。
4.a boy from another city named hao hengchuan played extremily well.此句為優秀句。分別用了介詞短語和分詞作定語。
5 。extremily應該為extremely
6.and really it was a flawless preformance. 應該為and it was really a flawless preformance.
7.wa改為was
評分：78
評語：首先字數上符合要求，（108個詞）。敘述流暢清晰，簡潔明了。大部分語法點準確，個別辭彙拼寫不夠準確，總得來說，達到了題目的要求，是篇不錯的習作。望今後在時態，及單詞拼寫方面多加注意。另外多積累基礎知識。堅信通過不斷練習積累會不斷提高的。