場景描寫:在海里游泳-Swimming in the Sea
在海里游泳
【內容提示】
炎熱的夏天，你去青島旅行。一天下午，你去海濱避暑，第一次在海水裡游泳。看到大浪，聽到濤聲，起初你有些害怕。但當看見一個弱小的男孩向大海游去時，你感到害臊。受到小男孩的鼓舞，你向前游去，經受了狂濤大浪的洗禮。
【作文示範】
Swimming in the Sea
It was in hot summer that I took a trip to Qingdao, a port city in Shandong Province, One afternoon, I decided to go to the seaside to get relief ① from the heat. For the first time in my life, I swam in the sea.
At first, I was worried because though I was not a bad swimmer in the swimming pool, the sea was different. The waves coming one after another to the shore made a great noise and I thought they were going to swallow me up. I was terrified. Cautiously ② and slowly, I went close to the water. How cold it was! I was just about to give it up when I suddenly caught sight of a small boy who was about a head shorter than me. Weak as he seemed, he went straight into the sea without hesitation. I felt a little ashamed.“What a timid ③ girl I am!”I said to myself.
Encouraged by his bravery ④, I continued advancing. Soon all of my body was covered by water. Before I got ready for a dive, a wave came over. It struck my face heavily and the water went into my eyes, nose and mouth. How bitter and salty it tasted! But I was not discouraged at all. I wiped off the water on my face, took a deep breath, and began swimming happily.
The waves became larger and larger, as if the sea was angry with me. When I saw a wave in the distance, I would hold my breath, and just before it came to where I was, I jumped up and easily kept myself from it. How exciting! I was just like lying on the clouds!
All that afternoon, I swam and jumped and had a very good time. When finally I had to leave, I took a last look at the sea. The waves were still beating the shore, but I was no longer frightened. “I must thank that little boy,”I said to myself.“It was he who gave me the courage.”
【詞語解釋】
①relief [ri'li:f] n. 減輕；解除
②cautiously ['k&:M sli] ad. 謹慎地；細心地
③timid ['timid] a. 膽怯的；缺乏自信心的
④bravery ['breiv ri] n. 勇敢；大膽
【寫法指要】
1）本文作者寫了她第一次在海里游泳的情況。但是，她主要不是敘述自己如何游泳，而是描寫她由膽怯到勇敢，甚至敢於與驚濤駭浪爭高下的轉變過程。
2）作者在文中使用了擬人和明喻兩種修辭格：前者如“…swallow me up….”和“…as if the sea was angry with me….”，後者如“It was just like lying on the clouds.”。此外，有些句型如“… be just about to do…when….”，“Weak as he seemed….”用得很好，值得借鑑。
場景描寫:在海里游泳-Swimming in the Sea