dear students:
our school will organize to go on an outdoor hiking. the aim is near jiangjun mountain. we hope you can relax yourselves. all the students need to take the drink, wear their sports shoes. please meet on march 12th at 8:00am, we will meet at the school gate. please don’t miss it. please come on time! that’s all, thank you.
school office.
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1. our school will organize to go on an outdoor hiking. 改為our school will organize an outdoor hiking.
2. the aim is near jiangjun mountain. 改為we will go to jiangjun mountain.
3. 文章脈絡清晰, 結構完整，把要去短途旅行的注意事項說的清楚明白。繼續努力！